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Band 5

News stories on TV and in newspaper are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about it?

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Whereas there are some people who believe pictures in media reports would
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 a more effective way than words, others
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 to disagree with that. From my point of view, I strongly believe with the
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 a photograph is
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. In fact, images can
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text, since someone just
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 to stare at it
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 of having to read. So on, at the same time a
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 a newspaper or a magazine, it will provide her or him the idea about what is the
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 subject
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, giving them some idea about the message
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 trying to be sent.
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, seeing a
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 of a dead body on
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paper ought to demonstrate instantaneously that a tragedy has happened, and even
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 someone has been murdered.
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, a bigger quantity of people from society can understand the matter exhibited, since even the ones who do not know how to read are able to understand what the subject of the situation approached in the news is, becoming it more effectively
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 through public. In
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 context, if a minor see a photo
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 a magazine of two people kissing, she or he will probably deduce they are lovers.
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reality than a text. While
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 who wrote it down in it, a
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 tends to show, most of
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, the situation how it really happened. As an example, if an author writes down on a news report that a victim of a crime was at the crime scene wearing a pink skirt, but it
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 contains a
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 of
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person
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 and her clothes appears to be more reddish than pinker, it shows that even if the typer was not a specialist in colours, he tried to explain the situation by giving his perspective about it,
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, it did not correspond to reality. In summary, images from news and magazine can
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 the truth without having a
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person
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 point of view in it, despite
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the fact that it is widely spoken, as I tend to agree that visualizing something is way more effective than reading another's
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 about it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convey
  • emotions
  • visual aids
  • retain
  • transcend
  • language barriers
  • accessible
  • misleading
  • context
  • comprehensive
  • critical thinking skills
  • sensitive content
  • graphic
  • disturbing
  • emotional well-being
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