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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
It’s undeniable that a
lot
 of
people
 prefer
meat
 over vegetables. Everyone should a adopt vegetarian diet because consuming a
lot
 of
meat
 can cause health problems.
This
 essay will discuss why I completely agree with
this
 statement by providing two reasons. The
first
 reason is eating
meat
 causes
heart
disease
.
In other words
, when a person eats a
lot
 of
meat
, he might get
heart
disease
 which leads to death.
For example
, my uncle used to eat a
lot
 of
meat
 but one day, while he was eating, he wasn’t feeling well so he decided to go to the hospital, when he arrived, they checked on him, and they told him that he has
heart
disease
.
Therefore
, consuming a
lot
 of
meat
 causes you
heart
 trouble.
Although
 some
people
 are used to eating
meat
 every day, it’s bad for their health . The
second
 reason is you might gain weight.
This
 means when you eat a
lot
 of
meat
, you’re going to be fat because
meat
 has a
lot
 of protein.
For example
, my brother eats a
lot
 of
meat
, and his weight got increased by 22.
Therefore
, eating a
lot
 of
meat
 makes you fat.
Although
 some individuals say eating
meat
 is harmless, their completely wrong. To conclude,
this
 essay discussed why I completely agree with
this
 statement because eating
meat
 causes
heart
disease
 and you might gain weight. In my opinion,
people
 should care about their health by limiting their consumption . I recommend that
people
 should count the calories that they consume a day.
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