You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter introduce yourself say why you are interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in starting a course at your

sports

club

. My name is E'zoza, and I am nearly 16 years old. I have been a team leader with 2 years of experience, but nowadays, I am particularly interested in

sports

. I am interested in joining

this

sports

club

because I want to improve my fitness. I believe that if I stop exercising, I will never lose weight.

Additionally

, I would like to participate in

tennis

competitions. My parents believe that I have a passion for

tennis

. Despite

this

passion, I know I must stay active.

Moreover

, I

also

have a passion for

chess

Last

year, I won a

chess

competition. It was relatively simple, but I believe the next competition may be more challenging. I have a few questions about the

club

. Can you provide advanced training in both

chess

and

tennis

Additionally

, how much does membership at the

sports

club

cost per month? I am interested in joining both the

chess

and

tennis

programs, and I am willing to pay the required fees. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response. Sincerely, E'zoza

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complete response

Expand on why there are no sports facilities in the college and how joining the sports club will benefit you.

single idea per paragraph

Separate the different topics into distinct paragraphs for clarity, such as your interest in tennis and chess.

complete response

The letter covers all the required points, including the introduction, the reason for interest in the sports club, and questions about the club's facilities and costs.

suitable writing tone

The writing tone is polite and formal, suitable for a letter to a club manager.

logical structure

The letter is logically structured with a clear flow from introduction to closing.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are appropriate and add a nice touch of politeness.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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also
for example
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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

198 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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