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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

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Some
people
 think that there are fewer
languages
 in the
world
 that will make life easier and some
languages
 die out every year is not crucial. From my point of view, even decreasing the number of
languages
 in the
world
 might make life easier, I still believe that it is very important to stop the
languages
 die out. On the one hand, having fewer
languages
 in the
world
 could make
people
’s lives easier for some
reasons
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reason
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.
First
 of all,
people
 can communicate easier when they travel or work abroad.
As a result
, everyone could understand each other quickly.
Secondly
, every country often tends to exchange their goods and cooperate together,
thus
 most
people
 still have to study some more
languages
 to communicate that may take a lot of time and money to do.
Therefore
, if there are fewer
languages
 in the
world
, learners only need to focus on one or two
languages
.
On the other hand
, disappearing a
language
 in each country would be a particularly alarming problem. The
first
 reason is that most countries have their own mother tongue,
however
, if
this
language
 is extinct in the future, its nation might lose the unique feature. To illustrate
this
, each
language
 tends to have its own beauty according to its culture and lifestyle which only
people
 in
this
 country can understand and use.
Secondly
,
languages
die
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that die
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 out may lead to
misunderstand
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misunderstanding
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 something in the past as most documentaries often were written
by
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in
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 original
language
. To sum up, while having fewer
languages
 might be easier for
people
’s life, it is
also
 particularly critical to have their own
language
 in each nation.
Thus
, disappearing
languages
 every year would be a certainly serious problem that everyone should care
.
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about.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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