Some students works while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

The access
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to education became tangible nowadays;
however
, some
students
still have difficulties
to maintain
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themselves studying. It can be financial or family issues, many people have their motives to divide their
time
between
work
and
study
. Frequently, it can generate personal and development problems. The practice of
work
and
study
, at the same, is a challenge. The lack of
time
is not the only problem. When people
study
part
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time
and
work
in
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the rest of the day, they see themselves exhausted at night. Not only
a
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physical exhaustion
,
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but
a
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mental as well because many times,
students
are not capable to enjoy
a
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leisure
time
. Together, the tiredness and absence of
time
to keep a rhythm of
study
at their houses
,
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reflects on their
education
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educational
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development.
Consequently
, a pressure to equilibrate and get
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handle
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with all
this
appear
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. With
this
sensation became common to see
students
with psychological problems,
such
as depression and anxiety. Not always is possible to dedicate exclusively to
study
,
however
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is extremely necessary the ability to see our limits. The capability to notice signs and symptoms of exhaustion, stress and anxiety and search for help is essential. Sometimes, people just need to slow down and follow their own pace.
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fewer classes
on
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in
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college or
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hours of
work
are some of the solutions to think about it. Based on
this
, it is easy to find a person who
divide
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time
between
work
and studies. The lack of
time
to
study
more at home or to enjoy free
time
are some reasons to
students
feeling
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feel
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under pressure and develop psychological problems.
Be
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capable to notice how
this
routine is affecting wealth being and
study
development is necessary to keep a better
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lifestyle
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life style
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.
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