An increasing number of children have become hooked on fat food and aerated drinks that do not provide much nutrition. This poor diet has led to a rise in obesity among children. What are the problems that are associated with obesity in children and what steps could be taken to prevent it?

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formula of diet and
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unhealthy
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dietary
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the increase of obesity among
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generation. There are several problems
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essay followed by reasons and examples, as well as steps to prevent the issues. One of the problems of the negative
foodstyle
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is because of the trend in kids.
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,
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this
age friendship can play important role in
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children
behavior
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and lifestyle
such
as
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the trend
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trend
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in
school
or they simply follow their friends
habit
in terms of
food
.
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, another problem that
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to be considered is most of them think that fat
food
and aerated water are more delicious than healthy
food
, which
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the
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problem of any kind of
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.
For example
, kids tend to eat healthy
food
only if their family is watching and not because of their awareness to eat healthy
food
.
Hence
, nutritious
food
is still
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issue to be applied
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young
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generation. A possible solution to
this
problem
is educate
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little girls and boys in
school
by presenting a fun learning in "how to eat health and nutritious
food
" to illustrate take,
for
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conduct lunch together in
school
while the teachers
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lessons about what kind of
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healthy
meal should be.
In addition
, teachers can give a standard of the meal they should bring in order to build a
habit
of
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nutritious
food
. Another sensible approach is that parents should build up
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dietary
habit
from
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because house and family
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the main part of kids growth.
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this
habit
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home-cooking together each day or
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party in
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big
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day.
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younger to learn how to cook is one of the best
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to keep them away from bad foodstyle. To sum up, children may
hooked
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on
fat
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fast
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food
and aerated drinks due to
trend
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in
school
or the taste of the fast meal, but it can
be mitigate
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by education in
school
and parents guidance in
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so that, they can be aware of the importance of
keep
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the healthy lifestyle.
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