Many parents choose to teach their children at home rather than sending their children to school. Do you think the benefits of home-schooling outweigh its drawbacks?

In
this
day and age, many people hold a strong view that homeschooling is a better way to develop
children
rather than sending them to school. While
this
statement is valid to some extent, I would argue that it may do more harm than good. Without a shadow of a doubt, studying at home brings several advantages for
children
.
In other words
, as parents are the
one
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who
are
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most familiar with their toddler’s diverse abilities, they can set a custom-tailored curriculum for the
children
.
For instance
,
children
who are not good at mathematics will have more time to learn and practice
this
subject rather than spending time on other subjects which they already have a firm grasp on. If they go to school, they may struggle
keeping
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up with their classmates.
Hence
, it is unfair to ignore the positive impact of homeschooling
toward
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children
. While the redeeming features of homeschooling
is
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widely acknowledged, it is unfair to ignore those of studying at school since it enables
children
to grow better both academically and mentally. Owing to the teacher's well-trained professional skills, they would know the common sense of education and are able to summarize the core of knowledge.
This
allows
children
receiving traditional education to excel academically.
Besides
, schools with a large number of students are considered a miniature society, which helps
children
to enhance their soft skills
such
as communication.
As a result
,
this
will help
children
to develop cooperation skills and learn how to work with others which will help them in their work when they go to adulthood To conclude, despite the tremendous benefits of homeschooling, I personally believe that it cannot overshadow its drawbacks and guardians should make their toddlers
to
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apply

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attend school’s educational system.
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