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People buy a product if it fulfill their needs, there is no need for advertisement to what extent do you agree or disagree with it ?

#people #product #advertisement
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We are living in the modern era,
advertisement
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 is the most vital role in every human life. the entire world busy into fulfilling own needs.
advertisement
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 to get the latest update about what new
product
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 launch in the market. I totally disagree with
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 statement. I would like to explain it at length in the paragraph to come.
To begin
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 with, promotion is a significant role in awareness about new upgrade products in the market. nowadays, there is every
person
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 connected with social
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sites
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 and media. when a commercial
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 launch a new
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then
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 an individual
tohave
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to have
have
 go through knowledge about the
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. we are going aware of variety and brand.
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, Ambani is the richest
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 in India. he becomes a brand ambassador. Ambani year launch new
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. he is the owner of Reliance
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 and jio
company
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. majority of individuals always buy a home grocery from Reliance mall. when he had a promotion about jio
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.
then
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 he did free data and free balance in
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.
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, every massive were bought
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 whereas, they won't need.
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, how do they know about jio
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 ? only go through advertisements.
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, with
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this
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 the income of many people is associated. as well as, a huge amount of benefits for television, manufacturing companies,
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sellers
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 and
buyer
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buyers
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. people always have curiosity for use new
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 rather than, use the old
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.
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, when whichever,
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 announcement about new things
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firstly
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 they are playing
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 game with the customer. we explain that when
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 start new
product
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firstly
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 they sell
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cheapest
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at cheapest
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 price after that, customer
buy
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 a new
product
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 and they take things. every
person
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 has knowledge about the good and bad
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 go through the
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. conclusion, every
person
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 need to be aware of the
product
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 Hance,
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 is the best way to fulfil every
person
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 needs. awareness is not only the best way to gain knowledge but
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 help change lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • awareness
  • functionality
  • existence
  • potential customers
  • demand
  • features
  • benefits
  • purchase decisions
  • perceived value
  • necessity
  • brand image
  • product perception
  • differentiate
  • crowded market
  • persuade
  • emotional responses
  • connection
  • multiple options
  • word-of-mouth
  • social media influence
  • marketing campaigns
  • positive word-of-mouth
  • inform
  • drive purchase decisions
  • superior
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