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Some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school years. Do the advantages of teaching foreign languages to young children outweigh its disadvantages?

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These days, some
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 in primary schools are taught other
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. In my opinion, the advantages of
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 phenomenon outweigh its disadvantages. Teaching
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 another
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 at the age of primary school could lead to confusion in acquiring a native
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. At
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 young age,
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 are still learning or in the process of establishing their mother tongue, and
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,
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 who have been taught more than just their native
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 will be confused about choosing their
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.
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 teaching young
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 new
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 requires teachers who have qualifications in teaching but
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 know well about
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's cognitive development. Take Vietnam as an example, in Vietnam
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 are taught English at primary schools but teachers have no knowledge of the
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's cognitive development so some
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 are not able to learn new
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 and some are neither fluent in Vietnamese nor English.
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, the advantages of teaching
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 foreign
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 outweigh the disadvantages. The most noticeable advantage of teaching primary pupils other
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 is the attainment of a native accent. As they are still developing their cognitive ability,
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 can learn new
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 more easily than adults and their accents could be more native-like as they practice. Another advantage of teaching new
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 to
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 as early as primary school is that they can learn new cultures and have a chance to meet more people. As
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 are the key to communication, learning more
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 means that
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 can communicate with more people all over the world.
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, learning new
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 could improve
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’s minds in speaking, listening, reading and even writing skills. To be fluent in
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children
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 have to improve
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-related skills and
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, it could be a benefit for their development. Take listening skills as an example, when they are studying that skill they develop their willingness to listen to others which could help them to be more empathetic. In conclusion, the benefits of teaching foreign
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 at primary school outweigh its disadvantages.
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task achievement
You should strive to present a clear position on the issue throughout the essay in order to strengthen task response scores. Establishing your opinion early and reinforcing it with each paragraph is key to conveying a coherent argument.
coherence cohesion
Aim for a clearer introduction that includes a thesis statement outlining the forthcoming points. This will help the reader understand the structure of your essay and the sequence of points you will address. In your conclusion, restate your thesis in the context of the arguments you've presented.
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While you've made some main points on the advantages and disadvantages, you should aim to support them with more detailed and relevant examples. Specific examples serve to illustrate your points and make them more persuasive, enhancing the overall effectiveness of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a more logical structure with clear topic sentences that introduce the focus of each paragraph effectively. Additionally, ensure that transitions between points are smooth, and the relationship between ideas is clear, to improve the flow of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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