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Some people believe that homework should not be given to school children. Others, however, say that homework is an important requirement for children to be able to develop appropriately. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#people #homework #school #children #requirement
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It is usually debated
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whether Homework is a vital part of
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school
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cariculum
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curriculum
 or not.I acknowledge that it has a wide range of
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benefits
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However
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 it has some drawbacks too.Both of which are discussed below. Home assignments given to children post
there
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school
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 increases the burden on them drastically.They had already spent 7 to 8 hours of
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their
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 day
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in
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studying and on top of it giving them more work is not right.Childhood is an age in a
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 life where he or she makes
most
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 of its mental
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 physical growth.In order to achieve
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 personal growth they should
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 time doing extra
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extracurricular
 activities like playing sports,pursuing
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 hobbies etc. but completing homework on a regular basis becomes a hurdle
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it
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 there are many children
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 are good
in
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 things other than studies
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 as singing,dancing, sports,drawing etc. they can only explore
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 only and only if both studies and extra
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curricular
 activities are balanced which can only be achieved if
school
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 syllabus is
desined
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designed
 in a format which is
implimented
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implemented
 in the
school
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 itself.
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hand
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an academic
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 point of view it is very important.In order to score good marks a child needs self practice. He can not just rely on teachers and
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 because
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 of the day
although
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 the
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 is 7 to 8 hours long each subject only gets 1 hour in it.
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 if a student is studying physics he needs to solve questions and practice by himself so that he can understand his
short comings
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shortcomings
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 and
self evaluate
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 because physics is
such
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 a subject that a teacher can only teach you methods and equations
how
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 to implement them in order to solve problems can only be learned by practice which can only be done by home assignments.
To conclude
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homeworks
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homework
are
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 important and should be a part of
school
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 but
they
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 should be added
in ciricullum
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to the curriculum
 only after children pass
their
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 tender age and
understands
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 what is good for them and where their
intrest
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interests
 lies and have
choosen
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chosen
 their subjects
accordingly
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