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some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated.

In recent days
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internet
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 is used globally, the
internet
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 speed is steadily increasing day by day. By utilising unlimited
internet
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people
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 can maintain close relations with others,
on the other hand
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because of networks
people
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 and communities are getting
edicted
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edited
 to mobiles and becoming more
isloted
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isolated
.
Opinion
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 on
this
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 statement
are
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 mentioned below. It totally depends on a person to limit the use of
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 for only required work, entertainment and make sure that they are giving time to their loved
once
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. It cannot be stated that by using various networks
people
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 are becoming separated. they are many cases,
becuase
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because
 of
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internet
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people
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 are getting connected with one other.
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, considering many families their children are staying away from their parents
moreover
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 they are getting touch with each other with the help of video call which is accessed through
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.
Now a days
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 in a family every one
are
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 busy with their personal life. In
this
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 type of
scenario
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people
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 are
atleast
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at least
 getting close, with the help of
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internet
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 by messaging or sending
the
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apply
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pictures or videos which make others feel happy
my
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by
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 looking
those
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.
for example
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, in present situations even though many countries are suffering
with
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 pandemic situations, many companies irrespective of their sector maintained
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a connection
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connection
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connections
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 with colleagues because they attended meeting
through
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online with the help of
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internet
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the internet
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. To conclude, it is not to say that other points of
views
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view
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 are
totally
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 without merit.
Alternatively
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internet
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 is helped easily to interact with
people
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 through a phone or video call when they are in different locations.

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