In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Evidence suggests that eating an excessive amount of
fast-
food
cause health problems in some nations. Some people argue that higher
tax
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on these kinds of
foods
should be imposed by authorities.
However
, I completely disagree with the given statement because of some reasons which will be discussed in detail.
Firstly
, increasing
tax
on fast meals has more impact only on certain income groups.
To begin
with, just poor families will not affordable to purchase fast
food
. Simply put, a high percentage of people in society are in middle and affluent groups who are still able to pay more money to buy
foods
such
as pizza, burgers and french-fries to follow their desire so that
this
solution is less likely to be effective to decline consumption of
fast-
food
and junk
food
.
As a result
, the state should
aware
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people about the drawbacks of these fast prepared dishes and provide healthy
foods
for them at
lower
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cost.
Secondly
, due to hectic
lifestyle
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individuals prefer to eat fast
food
. In fact,
this
is more convenient and faster rather than other
foods
and families might purchase it even with the growth in
tax
.
Therefore
,
this
has a straight
effect
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on people’s income. Take a person who is addicted to fast
food
as an example, there is no matter for them to spend more money on it without paying attention to the price.
Hence
government should boost the quality of
fast-
food
products and make them healthier
instead
of increasing taxes. In conclusion, I believe
although
intake more
fast-
food
trigger health disease, implementing
tax
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on these kinds of
foods
is not workable as
this
rule just targets poverty-stricken families and fail to prevent individuals from buying and eating it due to quick preparation and their appetite.
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