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Do you often have dreams? Do you usually remember your dreams

#dreams
Everyone in
this
life
 has a
dream
 to follow, and they want to achieve their goal the thought makes us happy and lets us keep going in
this
 growth even if we stumble, the
dream
 helps us rise
consequently
 I couldn’t imagine living my
life
 without a
dream
 or putting a plan to achieve what I want in
this
 world. The
dream
 is changed depending on our circle
life
 when we grow up it is various from when we are young or when we teenagers or an adult. My
dream
 is to become a doctor‏ and the specialization is
heart
 surgery it is wonderful to think about how you can help other people and give them another chance to live and
heart
 disease have more Its causes are a plethora of, could be infection, parasites,
heart
 attack, etc The
heart
 is the basis for the
life
 of
this
 body. Knowing everything about it changes your thinking. How can a piece the size of the palm how the body gets work Now the
dream
 is changed I couldn’t achieve
this
 one in my
life
 owing to the fact that my grade at my school is less than what the universities required to study
this
 major buy I can’t stop thinking about
this
 I read I read to expand my knowing repertoire on
this
 topic. ‏ And my new
dream
 right now is merely to get a high score in the IELTS exam.
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