It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach with behaviour to children

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This
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firm conviction is that
punishment
does not have much of a role to play in
this
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the question depends on the age of the
child
. To punish a very young
child
is both wrong and foolish, as an infant will not understand what is happening or why he or she is being punished. Once the age of Reason is changed
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, a
child
can be rewarded or for good behaviour and
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from bad.
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approach will achieve more than harsh
punishment
, which might entail many negative consequences unintended by parents. To help a
child
learn the difference between right and wrong, teachers and parents should
firstly
provide good role modelling in their own behaviour. After that, if sanctions are needed, the
punishment
should not be
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physical nature at that merely sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people to hit some other ones and outcome which may well result in the
child
is starting to bully others. Nor should the
punishment
be in any way cruel. Rather, teachers and parents can use a variety of methods to deceive wine their young charges
such
as detention, withdrawal of privileges, and time-out. Making the
punishment
fit the crime is
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notion which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti have
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or apologise to someone they have hurt. In
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responsibility is developed in the
child
which leads to much better future behaviour than does
punishment
.
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