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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congesstion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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One of the most serious issues facing the majority of large urban areas is
traffic
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 jams. The main reason for
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 is that there are too many private cars on the roads these days and a viable solution is to introduce more
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 schemes. The number of people owning cars increases year on year, with most families now having more than one
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. Most people like the convenience of travelling at the time they want to rather than being restricted to public transport timetables, so they prefer to drive themselves around rather than taking the bus or train.
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 is despite the fact that they frequently have to sit in long
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 queues as they near the
city
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 centre. Whenever I have to attend
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a meeting, I always take my
car
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 because it means that I can leave home when I want to rather than getting stressed about getting to the station in time to catch the train. A solution
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 proving successful in many areas is
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 schemes.
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 is where a person parks her
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 for free in a large
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 park on the outskirts of the
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 and take a bus for the final part of her journey. The fee that person has to pay for the bus trip is usually very small and
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 public transport system is generally very regular, running every ten minutes or so. A survey carried out in the
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 of Brisbane showed that the rush hour congestion decreased by 10% when the council set up a
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 scheme to the north of the
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. There was an additional drop of another 10% in
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 volume when a
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 scheme began operating to the south. In conclusion, the major urban problem of
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 congestion caused by the excessive number of private cars on the streets can be resolved by the familiarization of
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 systems
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 busy towns.
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