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Modern society is becoming more concerned about the increase in juvenile crime. what do you think is the cause of the increase in juvenile crime? what solutions can you suggest.

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In today's advanced society, people are worried about an increasing rate of crime committed by youngsters. In my opinion, there are several reasons behind
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, influence by media, family ignorance, inappropriate friends circle etc. In
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problem
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. Nowadays, due to the advancement of technology, our life has become easier than before, but with
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, we are facing the
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 of rising juvenile crime.
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, a young generation is mostly addicted to watching Netflix, amazon prime, and content on these platforms are most disturbing and badly affect young minds.
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, watching harmful videos on YouTube or following an unethical group on social media
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 leads youngsters towards doing serious offences.
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, in today's competitive world,
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 themselves are too busy in their jobs and can not give proper
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 or attention to their
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 and
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 contribute to
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problem
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, there are various ways by which we can solve
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.
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 of all, the
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 should be careful about what their
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 are watching on the internet, how much
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 the child is spending on
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, and the most important thing is, spending
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 with them.
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, the
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 should know their friends circle very well and to whom the
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 are spending
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 because at
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 age, by seeing others taking drugs or alcohol, or doing smoking, the
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 get easily attracted towards these bad habits and these things may
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 responsible for the dangerous offence. In conclusion, the young mind is very curious and that age is very delicate. There are numerous things around them by which the
kids
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 get easily affected and start doing that and
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 leads to them in the direction of crime. So, the
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 should be more careful about the
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 and take proper action.

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