Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

In the modern world, there are various ways to connect with other people through the Internet and online platforms. While the advance of technology leads to change the types of relationships between us, I personally think that
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Technology has had an impact on our business, education and social life.
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, by using te
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technological
pplications like Gmail, Outlook, Google Drive, business works would be sa
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ver a
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nd faster, sp
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n international trade since they do not need to travel around the world to discuss ab
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e contracts or the opportunities.
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l
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ourses which are recorded by teachers and are posted for students. By doing
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, students are not required to go to school and would have flexible time.
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, our social activities tend to happen
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he Internet so we have fe
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irect communication.
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, most of us use Facebook to make new friends wh
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e may not meet in real. In my opinion, technological development has affected our relationships bo
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f life. On the one hand, there are some positive ways.
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, if we are with long distance, it will be more difficult to ex
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nformation via writing letters. Nowadays, in
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interactions
y email, phone or video are as good as face-to-face meetings, and many of us be
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rom these, either in work or social contexts.
On the other hand
, new innovations make us to
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ve in fa
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ociety, and our time and our sympathy with each other usually decrease.
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ealth is br
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brusquely
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row up. In co
nclution,
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it is true that technology ha
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nfluence on communication in va
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ay, and I believe that there are both positive and negative effects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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