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in the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
Every day scientists are trying more and more to
autorize
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authorize
 various important processes in our
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, and one of them is applying
autopilot
 into
transport
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 industry. Yet will
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 changes lead to good consequences or not ?
Firstly
,
autopilot
 in cars will reduce
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accidents
 caused by human errors. Every year, many cases in a road occur
as a result
 of people falling
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asleep
 while driving.
Autopilot
 vehicles have a significant benefit of not
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getting
 tired , unlike people. The rate of accidents might be decreased
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if drivers will use
self-driving
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system
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.
Secondly
,
autopilot
 is an excellent option for
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peope
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people
, who
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 to drive physically. For
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 individuals, having
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 with
this
 system is
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 ideal way to maintain
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necessary
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 to use taxi services
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 to buy some products in
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for example
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other
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 hand, people
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 from
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cypher
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security
 problems, because never have
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persent
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per cent
ensurness
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ensures
. For
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 all data about
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driver
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 can
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, so it might lead to bad consequences
,
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 like somebody can know where you are, when do you left home and so on. In conclusion, I consider that self-driving systems in vehicles it's like
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 for automizing, for that will change our world
too
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more
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 technological sight, because we live in 21 century,
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a century
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 of modern technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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