Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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who believe that increasing jail sentences
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decrease the crime level.
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of them suggest we can find
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appropriate solution. While prisons have undoubted advantages, of which criminals are isolated, they have significant drawbacks, most notably appalling conditions and relapse. Historically, felon isolation was the most reliable method. On the one hand, cages are quite humane regarding
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other punishments which were constantly
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ages. It allows people
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a
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attempt in their lives.
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, prisoners allowed to work and earn money
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develop
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.
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and produce metal goods in turn, women could be dressmakers. Despite the advantages,
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of prisons are incredibly old. Dirty and
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jails could contain an enormous number of people.
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environment could cause
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substantial harm and provide phycological depression.
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, ‘dog-eat-dog’ relationships between their pear group could be so tense that could possibly cause conflicts.
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recidivism, as we marked before, prison is
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pressure on a daily basis. That means, people are adapting
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cruel
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environment and in the future after their inevitable release can’t live in a normal society.
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mind will try to find
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to his comfort zone
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crime will appear. In conclusion, while prisons are advantageous for society, it has some important disadvantages,
in particular
broken fates and relapse. If countries can invest in the development of
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system,
then
some of these problems can be lessened.
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