Worker often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want. What is your opinion about this?

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It is argued that labours between the ages of 60 to 65 have to resign from their jobs.
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, few nations believe that they can pursue as much as they can. I completely disagree with
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opinion and think that older
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have to retire.
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of all, I believe that older workers have to retire from their work especially if it is in government or in a big company to give a chance to youth.
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, staying in a position for a long period of time, cause a low opportunity for youth to become employed, and
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to get promoted quickly.
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, an article was published
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month showed a statistical percentage for unemployment, which reveals 80% unemployed youth.
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why it is important to retire to keep available chairs for youngsters.
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, I think within
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60 to 65
people
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have to start their own business.
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, during
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age
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people
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got enough experience that can let them
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have self-dependence, while at
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it is hard to become self-dependent because of immaturity and less experience.
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, most famous entrepreneurs have started their businesses within the
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of 60.
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, starting a business in old
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can be successful. In conclusion, I strongly believe that retiring early can give an opportunity for new generations to become employed, and on
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top of that retired
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have a chance to become self-dependent because
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will create a balance of jobs in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • pension systems
  • social security
  • life expectancy
  • mental and physical well-being
  • active and engaged
  • mentorship
  • knowledge transfer
  • job opportunities
  • workforce
  • physical strength
  • workplace safety
  • healthcare costs
  • accommodation
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