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Some people believe that life in a big city is difficult while others say that it is more convenient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities?

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Some people think that living in urban areas is disadvantageous. In my opinion, the benefits of living in the
cities
 outweigh its downsides. There are a number of drawbacks of living in urban areas that people should take considered. The principal drawback is that metropolises are overcrowded.
This
 leads to city dwellers suffering from urban air pollution and noise pollution,
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because the numerous private vehicles in
cities
 emit a lot of CO2 emission in the atmosphere and make t
he n
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oise in s
treets.
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For example
, in a survey by Dan tri newspapers in 2020, the government reported that the number of citizens moving to Hanoi increased by one in five since 2015, and
this
 problem exacerbated urban air pollution because of their personal vehicles.
In addition
,
cities
 cause damage to residents’ health.
This
 is largely detrimental for children who have poor diets and lack s
paces
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to do physical exercises,
this
 issue results in increasing obesity and diabetes in the major
cities
. In spite of the downsides mentioned above, I believe that living in
cities
 is a positive trend.
Firstly
,
cities
 are diverse places for cuisine.
This
 is largely beneficial for young generations who want to try many kinds of food coming from other countries,
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because famous foreign restaurants around the world or big brands of food
such
 as Starbucks and KFC always choose major
cities
 to open their brands.
Secondly
, urban areas offer a wealth of job opportunities.
This
 is because metropolises a
re headquarter
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of big corporations, multinational companies and leading institutes, these companies will need numerous employees from all fields
such
 as o
fficer
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workers ,scientists, programmers and managers. In conclusion, while living in
cities
 may have some negative aspects, I believe they are outweighed by the more significant positive aspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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