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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Increasing preference towards fast
food
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 is the leading cause of unhealthy nations.Few are of the opinion that imposing
taxation
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 on transfat cuisine discourage the public from buying it,while others believe that the public like to eat irrespective of the additional cost.
This
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 essay will discuss both views including my opinion on the positive benefits of additional
taxation
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 .
To begin
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 with,fast
food
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 culture is one of the leading causes of systemic illness in the
people
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,leading to an increased burden on the healthcare of a society.
Taxation
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 by the authorities will discourage citizens from spending on unhealthy
food
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.Even if they spend,they make sure to buy in small quantities.
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, the revenue generated from the tax can be used to create awareness among
people
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 about the bad effects of consuming unhealthy
food
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 on the organs of the body.
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,recently to curb the increasing number of obese cases in the city,local authorities imposed
taxes
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,which proved successful in deterring
people
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 from buying it.
Therefore
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,imposing
taxes
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 is one way to wake
people
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 up from bad dietary habits.
On the other hand
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,increased
taxes
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 will not deter fast
food
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 lovers.They consume it irrespective of the cost and is not a feasible solution in the long run.
Additionally
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,high
taxes
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 may result in the losses of these businesses,who are forced to wind up their operations affecting the revenue for local government.
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,a recent survey by Deccan Chronicle showed that the government was running on a deficit budget due to the winding up of fast-
food
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 restaurants.These are the reasons why critics feel that
taxation
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 is not a viable solution. To conclude,fast-
food
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 culture is a health hazard for modern society.
Although
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people
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 prefer to eat it irrespective of the cost;
however
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,in my opinion ,increased
taxes
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 will discourage
people
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 from buying it in large quantities.
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