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Band 8.5

You and your family have just rented an apartment and one or two problems occurred. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter • introduce yourself • describe the problems • what you would like him/her to do.

#apartment #two #landlord
Dear Mr Smith, My name is Natallia Krasnahir. I am a new tenant who moved in three months ago with a family. We live by address Zirmunu Street 70-101, first floor. I am writing to you to inform you about some issues with the flat I am renting. As it is already the middle of October and it is already quite cold, we were expecting the heating had already been started. Unfortunately, there is still none.
As a result
, it is chilling in the flat and we start having health issues because of it.
In addition
, the taps are really giving us a hard time because of leaking water our utility bill is
also
 reaching peaks. I would like to get these problems fixed as soon as possible,
otherwise
, I and my family are no longer interested in renting
this
 place. I would appreciate it if you could visit the place in order to look at the broken items. I look forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Natalia
Submitted by natallia.khrenava on

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Task Achievement
To further improve, consider providing more detailed suggestions on how the landlord might address the problems or offering your availability for a meeting to discuss the solutions. This could enhance your letter's persuasiveness.
Coherence & Cohesion
For an even stronger letter, try incorporating transition words or phrases between ideas within paragraphs and from one paragraph to the next. This will help create smoother connections between your points, making your letter even more coherent and easy to follow.
Task Achievement
You did a great job introducing yourself and clearly describing the problems you're facing.
Coherence & Cohesion
The structure of your letter, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, effectively guides the reader through your concerns.
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