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Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical services should not be run by profit-making companies. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, people are suffering from various types of diseases than in the past.
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, some
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care
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 organizations see it as a business opportunity and try to make more
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.
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, I believe that making more
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 using people's diseases is unethical.
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 essay will discuss reasons for having more disadvantages than advantages when
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care
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 organizations consider only their income.
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 and foremost, medical centres should receive a payment in order to maintain their facilities and pay the wages to employees.
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, they have to pay for electricity, building rent and doctors salaries.
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, owners of these facilities ask for payment from patients by providing various types of services
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 as doctor consultation fees, MRI testing.
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, medical centres must maintain their equipment and buy novel machines to provide a better service to their patients. As an example, high-end X-Ray machines.
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, some are trying to make unnecessary profits out of
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. To illustrate, when a patient visits a private hospital to get a consultation, the doctor influences him to do different types of testing from the hospital to make more income.
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 to that, some drug manufacturers trying to sell their products with a huge
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 margin. As an example, during COVID 19 pandemic situation, a drug importer in Sri Lanka earn huge revenue by selling PCR kits with an unethical
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 margin.
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, the government should regulate those things by introducing a code of ethics to people who work in the
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care
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 industry. To conclude,
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care
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 organizations should earn money to cover their expenses. Even so, they must not make an unacceptable
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 from it since their
first
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 priority must be to provide honest service to the patients.
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, my opinion is there are more demerits than merits when a
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care
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 organization is run as a
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-making company.
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