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Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #right #university #education #government #matter #background
in recent
dacades
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decades
,education
become
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important among the young generation.it is true that going to
university
 has a great impact on peoples future.so, some individuals believe that all
people
 have a right to study at
university
 and the government should pave the way for
people
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with out
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without
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 considering their financial background.from my point of view,going to
university
 is
essentisl
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essential
 for
people
 which
i
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 explain here.
firstly
,
university
 education plays a significant role in
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anyone's
anyones
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anyone's
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 life, it can be
effored
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offered
afforded
 a good job and a high salary.
therefore
 ,
people
 can provide a comfortable life for
themsefls
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themselves
 and their
family
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.
secondly
,the rate of crimes would be
decrised
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decreased
 because poverty
force
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forces
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people
 to
commite
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commit
commute
 a crime
such
 as
banke
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bank
 rubbery.if
government
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 makes
university
 free for
people
 ,
thay
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they
that
 can
expande
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expand
 their
knwoledge
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knowledge
 and
discovere
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discover
discovered
 their own potentials.
as a result
 ,each individual come to know how to live and
satisfied
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 with what they are doing.
in addition
,no one
choose
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 to
born
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 in which family and what condition, money should not consider as a great element for educating at universities.some
people
 spend their lives with the dream of going to
university
 but they can not
efford
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afford
 the tuition.there were so many gifted persons who kept the loof by poverty .so ,it is a governments
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 to prepare the best condition for
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a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 to study without any worries. it is true that universities expenditures should be considered too,some
people
 argue that tuition is
nessecary
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necessary
however
,the tuition need to be normal and anyone can pay. in conclusion,going to
university
 become
everyones
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everyone's
 right so
government
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the government
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 have to find a counterproductive solution for it .
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