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Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible, while others believe that children should not start primary school until they are six or seven-years-old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is much debate about when the transition between play-based preschool and the start of formal schooling should begin. For different purposes, the formal
school
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 starting age varies from country to country, ranging from four to
seven
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. Some people believe that “earlier is better”. On the one hand,
children
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 who receive formal instructions at four to five years old will hold advantages over those who start
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 at six to
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, since formal education can supply a good foundation for
children
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, promoting them to form their own ideas, communicate and socialize with other students, and develop their knowledge.
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, it may
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 make it possible for parents to return to the workforce earlier and reduce childcare costs. Other people,
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, argue that there will be negative consequences if
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 are forced to receive formal instruction at too early an age.
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 argument calls for an extension of informal, play-based preschool for the start of formal schooling to be delayed until the age of six to
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. If
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 are brought into
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 very young and
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 they are asked to behave in ways they cannot, they may become problem
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 later. Abundant evidence has shown that many
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improper
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 stem from starting
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 too early. In the interests of
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’s academic achievements and emotional well-being,
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 should be taken seriously. In conclusion,
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 some people think that
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 should start formal schooling at four to five, others believe that it should be delayed until six to
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. The decision depends on each country’s primary-
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 educational policy. In many parts of the world,
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 issue continues to be debatable about which policy is more likely to pay off.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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