Some people believe studying in a college or university is the best way to prepare for a successful career. Other people prefer to get a job as soon as they leave school and to develop their career through work experience. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many
students
now study in universities before entering a company, some people believe that
students
should start working since they are graduated from high schools,
this
essay will investigate both views but I am personally inclined to the
first
opinion. On the one hand, there are two primary reasons why graduates should get a job. The main reason is that some jobs prefer practical
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. Some jobs require
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rather than academic knowledge, to take chief as an example, they will learn different skills and be more experienced during
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. If they spend their time in universities, they will think it is a waste of time. Another reason is that they can gain working experience.
For instance
, in
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industry, sales can learn how to persuade customers to purchase a product through real-life experience. They can be more familiar
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the job when they start working
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an earlier age and
thus
perform better in the job.
On the other hand
, there are two reasons why
students
should keep studying in a college.
Firstly
, many jobs require professional knowledge. In universities, teens can learn some specific skills which are not taught in other places.
For example
, teachers in medic classes will teach them the side effects of each
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and some skills in doing an operation, the knowledge will be useful in their future work.
Moreover
, people can learn to collaborate with others when studying a college. When they have to complete projects and presentations with other classmates, they can learn how to communicate and collaborate with others.
As a result
, when they have to work with other colleagues in the future, they will be prepared for it. To conclude,
although
working earlier may have some benefits,
students
should still study in a university in order to develop their careers better.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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