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Not enough students around the world choose to study a science subject at university. what are the reasons for this? what impact does this issue have on society?

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Choosing a
science
 subject is not much popular for
students
 at the university level around the world.
This
 essay will examine the main causes of why graduates are not interested in selecting the
science
 stream and because of that what impact it causes on
society
. The two main reasons
students
 do not choose
science
 subjects to study are the conventional
education
system
 and expensive tuition
fees
.
In other words
, The traditional
education
system
 is too theoretical.
Students
,
therefore
, do not get the practical knowledge
that is
 required in the
science
 stream, and due to that fact, they think as a boring subject.
Moreover
, the
fees
 required to get admission into the
science
 subjects are more expensive. Due to
this
,
students
 from underprivileged family backgrounds are unable to get admission even if they are interested in
science
.
Thus
, higher
fees
 and the
education
system
 are the root cause of people not enrolling in
science
. On the other side, not choosing a
science
 field will impact
society
's economy and
also
 create discrimination problems. In other terms, we can say that a country may leave behind other countries in the field of
science
 as skills required people are less in the field.
As a result
, in some cases, the country has to depend upon the other country on
science
 and its related technologies. And that could cause an economic issue.
Also
,
students
 who have financial concerns are not getting admission to the university, which will lead to eliminating a large proportion of
society
, creating a discrimination issue. In conclusion, higher
fees
 and poor
education
system
 are the reason behind
students
 not selecting the
science
 subjects and as consequences economic and discrimination concerns arrived which affect the
society
.
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