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Not enough students around the world choose to study a science subject at university. what are the reasons for this? what impact does this issue have on society?

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Choosing a
science
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 subject is not much popular for
students
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 at the university level around the world.
This
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 essay will examine the main causes of why graduates are not interested in selecting the
science
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 stream and because of that what impact it causes on
society
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. The two main reasons
students
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 do not choose
science
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 subjects to study are the conventional
education
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system
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 and expensive tuition
fees
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.
In other words
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, The traditional
education
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system
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 is too theoretical.
Students
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,
therefore
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, do not get the practical knowledge
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 required in the
science
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 stream, and due to that fact, they think as a boring subject.
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, the
fees
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 required to get admission into the
science
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 subjects are more expensive. Due to
this
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,
students
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 from underprivileged family backgrounds are unable to get admission even if they are interested in
science
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.
Thus
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, higher
fees
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 and the
education
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system
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 are the root cause of people not enrolling in
science
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. On the other side, not choosing a
science
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 field will impact
society
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's economy and
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 create discrimination problems. In other terms, we can say that a country may leave behind other countries in the field of
science
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 as skills required people are less in the field.
As a result
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, in some cases, the country has to depend upon the other country on
science
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 and its related technologies. And that could cause an economic issue.
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,
students
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 who have financial concerns are not getting admission to the university, which will lead to eliminating a large proportion of
society
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, creating a discrimination issue. In conclusion, higher
fees
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 and poor
education
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system
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 are the reason behind
students
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 not selecting the
science
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 subjects and as consequences economic and discrimination concerns arrived which affect the
society
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.
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