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It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#technology #advances #cultures #two
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Nowadays,
technology
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 has become a necessary part of daily life and in globalization, and we can see the progression of digitalization. Many believe that technological advances and tradition are incompatible and advanced processes have adverse effects on several original cultures in various countries. I think that
technology
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 and local cultures in the modern world spread information about different traditional habits.
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 with, tradition and cultural value are significant as it connects our life to our roots.
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, in a global world, the internet and electronic devices life has become easy and convenient. In
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 way,
technology
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 and
culture
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 are interlinked to each other.
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, mobile phones and social media have made it easy for
people
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 to share many details and information in public.
People
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 own a personal computer in their home, and they have access to any articles, images, videos, and podcasts about traditions of one of the nations.
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, many platforms and social blogs allow
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 to write their comments about places, cities, and countries where they
traveled
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.
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, one can not pause the negative side of
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 on
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. Digital devices and new
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 have made cynical attitudes to which
people
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 are no more active to even think about their
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. The younger generation spends most of their time on social media, video games, and surfing the internet rather than cultural activities. In conclusion,
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 has developed devices, and anyone has connected to worlds with one touch in the mobile phone screen. Internet in cell phones has made it easy and convenient for
people
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 to see the cultural traditions without
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 too far.
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,
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 and
culture
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 need each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • advancement
  • globalization
  • dilutes
  • traditional cultures
  • social media
  • blending of cultures
  • preservation
  • platforms
  • adaptability
  • technological adaptations
  • uphold
  • consequence
  • integrate
  • cultural frameworks
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