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It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
technology
 has become a necessary part of daily life and in globalization, and we can see the progression of digitalization. Many believe that technological advances and tradition are incompatible and advanced processes have adverse effects on several original cultures in various countries. I think that
technology
 and local cultures in the modern world spread information about different traditional habits.
To begin
 with, tradition and cultural value are significant as it connects our life to our roots.
Also
, in a global world, the internet and electronic devices life has become easy and convenient. In
this
 way,
technology
 and
culture
 are interlinked to each other.
For instance
, mobile phones and social media have made it easy for
people
 to share many details and information in public.
People
 own a personal computer in their home, and they have access to any articles, images, videos, and podcasts about traditions of one of the nations.
Moreover
, many platforms and social blogs allow
people
 to write their comments about places, cities, and countries where they
traveled
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.
On the other hand
, one can not pause the negative side of
technology
 on
culture
. Digital devices and new
technology
 have made cynical attitudes to which
people
 are no more active to even think about their
culture
. The younger generation spends most of their time on social media, video games, and surfing the internet rather than cultural activities. In conclusion,
technology
 has developed devices, and anyone has connected to worlds with one touch in the mobile phone screen. Internet in cell phones has made it easy and convenient for
people
 to see the cultural traditions without
traveling
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 too far.
Therefore
,
technology
 and
culture
 need each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • advancement
  • globalization
  • dilutes
  • traditional cultures
  • social media
  • blending of cultures
  • preservation
  • platforms
  • adaptability
  • technological adaptations
  • uphold
  • consequence
  • integrate
  • cultural frameworks
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