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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

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Dear Sir or Madam, Noticing your job advertisement in an Australian magazine that you are looking for a person to take care of your six-year-old kid. I am writing
this
 letter to show keen interest regarding
this
 offer and request you to look favourably upon my application. I am Prabhjot Kaur, a resident of Unit 86, Carling Ford, NSW, Sydney. I have done my graduation in Medical Science from the University of North Sydney and after that, I did a post-graduation in Chemistry from the same college. During my study, I did a job in a kids-take-caring centre for about three years and I can provide you with a reference if you want.
Therefore
, I have experience in handling children. I ultimately know how to treat them even in emergency conditions.
Moreover
, I intend to pursue my education in the same field and I
also
 checked the list of renowned colleges in your city Perth. I hope I would be able to have the opportunity to live with your family.
Also
, I love to live with babies. So, I hope I fulfil all the necessary requirements for
this
 position. Hoping to hear from you regarding
this
 matter. Thanking you, Yours faithfully, Prabhjot Kaur
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