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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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Nowadays we are surrounded by a lot of
data
 that are accessible on the internet and other media. Some
people
 believe that it is a high-grade idea to share
data
 as much as possible through some ways
such
 as research of sciences, marketing, and education field. While others think that significant or noteworthy
information
 should be administered to
people
 without any cost. From my point of view,
people
 should have access to
data
 from legal and scientific ways because of supporting researchers. According to some beliefs, access to
data
 should be limited due to some rules
such
 as copyright law that helps authors for having more financial supplies.
For instance
, if researchers do not have financial concerns, they will focus on studies plans.
In addition
, some concepts
such
 as ethical considerations have a vital role in these views which is a kind of respectfulness to a variety of prospective.
Thus
,
this
 process can develop various knowledge.
on the other hand
, some
people
 who are fans of the free flow of
information
 think the solution to improve public science is free publishing. From
this
 point
,view
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 all humans must have access to
information
 especially in some areas
such
 as developing countries where there are not sufficient supplies for
people
.
For example
, one of the most practical ways is the internet
that is
 acceptable anywhere and anytime. In conclusion,
although
 the free flow of
information
 can provide equal opportunities;
however
,
this
 matter leads to many damages for
people
 who are working as a researcher.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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