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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The plots illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical machines and
amount
Correct article usage
the amount
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 of time that was spent on household chores in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, from 1920
a
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the
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 number of hours of
houswork
Correct your spelling
housework
 per week was decreasing almost every year until 2019.
In addition
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, using washing machine and refrigerator in
household
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the household
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were
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was
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 up to 100
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percentage
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per cent
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,
while
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 applying a
washine
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washing
 machine had a maximum which is about 70
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percentage
Replace the word
percent
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. To be more exact,
a
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the
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 number of hours of housework per week, per household fell significantly by 30
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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 in
1960
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the 1960
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 year.
Then
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, it had
slight
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a slight
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 drop which is
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a deacrese
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deacrese
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decrease
 of 10%.
According to
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 the chart, from 1920 the
percentage
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 of a vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 rose sharply by 1960,
meanwhile
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,meanwhile
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 the fraction of a
washine
Correct your spelling
washing
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
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 slowly increased by 30%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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