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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many schools require young students to learn a foreign
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. Some people believe that it is beneficial to them, while in
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 essay, I agree that they should not be forced to learn a non-local
language
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. The reasons are two-fold. The main reason is that it may cause stress to children. Learning languages is not an easy job, some of them are not able to learn due to different reasons,
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, they have some learning disabilities. If they are forced to learn a
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language
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 at school, they will feel stressed and anxious as they do not understand and cannot handle it. When they have to do some exercises or quizzes, they may receive a low mark and will be scolded by teachers, they will have a sense of inferiority as they feel like they are stupid compare to other classmates.
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, they will have low self-esteem and may lead to some mental problems. Another reason is that children may not be interested in it. Many of them think that learning a new
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 is boring and they are unwilling to learn. If schools force them to learn, students may have a loss of interest in that
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 along with the other
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 subjects.
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 will cause a serious distraction while having lessons, they will not have the motivation to learn and will not pay any hard work to study.
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, children cannot study a foreign
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 effectively. To conclude, forcing students to study a
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language
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 is not beneficial to them as they may not be interested and will feel stress while studying.
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