These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages?

when she was 7 her parents got divorced and non of them accepted her
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guy and moved
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Her grandmother accepted her till 15 but her
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died at that time.
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she became more alone than ever.
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raped her when she was alone at home ... She couldn'
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to anybody about
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issue for several years She had to live with them because she hadn'
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anybody else... Three weeks ago she wanted to see her mother and went to Rasht but when she arrived her mother said '
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when she wanted to
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back to Tabriz on the bus she killed herself by pill. several
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before her death she said
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goodbye
to me and abanded me forever. All the time she felt forlorn and cried behind the phone I tried to help her but I couldn'
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do anything We both want to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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