t is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Nowadays it is important to teach children what is wrong and what is right,
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between both for that they should know what bad things costs.
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because if there is no pressure they will do the same mistake again and again, rather than that parents should make aware their kids. With regard to punishment
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sum up, my view is that
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of what is wrong and what is right but, punishments should not harm in any physical or mental way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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