Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Discipline means 'to teach'.
Disclipline
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Discipline
your
child
means teaching them responsible
behaviour
and
self control
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. It is believed by some that discipline is the
responsibily
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responsibility
of
teachers
alone, whereas others believe that the
parents
can best teach discipline to their
child
. In my opinion,
this
process is guided by the
supevision
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supervision
of both the
parents
as well as
teachers
.
Firstly
, in recent years, in modern schools, it has been
observing
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that the kids are
vey
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very
indisciplined and there is a need to teach them how to behave and manage their temperament while dealing with others and in public. One way is,
teachers
can encourage them at schools by giving them rewards for their good
behaviour
and actions, while
punish
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them for their inappropriate
behaviour
.
Moreover
, we generally see that the kids listen and believe more
on
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their
teachers
and follow the things said by their
teachers
.
On the other hand
,
parents
, by birth, has been with
child
and understand their children and teach them more efficiently.
In addition
to that, the
parents
should be strict and take necessary action if the
child
is behaving
bad
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and teach him the difference between right and wrong.
However
, they are
also
emotionally connected with their children and
this
sometimes leads them to avoid their
child
mistakes and pamper him, which is not correct. In conclusion, a
discliplined
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disciplined
child
achieve
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success and respect in his life, whereas an
undiscliplined
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undisciplined
child
receive
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disrespect and become careless in his
further
life and
therfore
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therefore
, both
teachers
and
parents
contribute to the
nurrishment
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nourishment
of children's
behaviour
and help them to become a
respectfull
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respectful
and well mannered.
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