The diagrams below show a life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons when relevant.

The diagrams below show a life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons when relevant.
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The following diagrams illustrate the cycle of
life
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of a species of huge fish which is named the salmon.
Overall
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, there are 3 main stages in
this
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diagrams
According to
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flow
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the flow
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chart, salmons begin
life
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as eggs hidden among the reeds, under the small stones in the upper river. After 5 to 6 months, these eggs hatch into “fry”-baby salmon and they will start their process of growing in three main stages.
The first step is
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that “fry” with
the
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a
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size
from
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of
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3 to 8cm move to the lower river with fast flowing and they will stay there for approximately 4 years.
Subsequently
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, “fry” become “smolts” with
the
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a
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size
from
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of
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12 to 15cm, they swim to the open sea and live here for around a period of 5 years.
Finally
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, smolts grow up and change into “
aldult
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adult
salmons” with
the
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a
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size
from
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of
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70 to 75cm, the mature fish go back to their birthplace in the upper river which has
slow moving
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slow-moving
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, the eggs are
layed
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laid
played
and the cycle of
life
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start
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again. In conclusion,
this
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ends the description of the process of salmon’s
life
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cycle.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words life with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater streams
  • small pebbles
  • reeds
  • alevin
  • yolk sac
  • nourishment
  • fry
  • grow stronger
  • grow larger
  • parr
  • defined markings
  • estuaries
  • smolt
  • adapt to saltwater
  • ocean
  • full size
  • sexual maturity
  • spawn
  • life cycle
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