Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time discuss both sides and give your opinion
The
art
lesson in school is often categorized by people
as an unimportant subject
in today's school. Meanwhile, some people
said that art
as much crucial as any other Add a verb
isart
wasart
subjectsuch
as science or economics. Correct your spelling
subject such
subjects such
This
essay will talk both
points of view followed by reasons and examples.
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about both
To begin
with, art
knowledge encourage
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encourages
the
creativity and Correct article usage
apply
the
emotional development Correct article usage
apply
for
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of
childern
. Take it Correct your spelling
children
for
example, paint and Add the comma(s)
,for
music
. Paint is allowed people
to gain is inspiration
in almost everything even when it is not a huge topic. Add an article
an inspiration
Therefore
, in art
class
the creativity of the youth is forced to be developed wisely so that they may Add a comma
,class
sucsess
to make a painting. Correct your spelling
success
succeed
For instance
, music
is the part of emotional development that produced
from all of Add a missing verb
is produced
over
the class journey. It Change preposition
apply
develop
from the practice of playing Change the verb form
develops
music
until they can play music
properly and enjoy playing some songs. In addition
, music
such
as pianoAdd the comma(s)
, for example,
for example
can help people
in
all ages to calm and relax, or in the other words, provides better emotional control.
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of
On the other hand
, a number of people
have said subject
such
as science, economics or language is more vital than art
or sport. It relays
on opinions that in the future Correct your spelling
relies
the
need of knowledge on those Correct your spelling
they
subject
quite unnecessary. For example
, many sucsessful
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successful
people
work on
either science or Change preposition
in
bussiness
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business
,
and if it Remove the comma
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include
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includes
art
or sport, they have to be super talented or have Correct your spelling
privilege
previledge
to be noticed in Correct article usage
the previledge
art
industries. So that, parents, undenyingly, direct their childern
to avoid Correct your spelling
children
those kind
of job and choose Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
common
job to have a promising future even though their kid Add an article
a common
is actually have
talent on them. Change the verb form
actually has
Hence
, the capability of playing music
that children gain for school is often unuseful in their long-term future.
To sum up, art
is an important subject
because it encourage
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encourages
the
creativity and Correct article usage
apply
help
to develop Change the verb form
helps
emotional
aspect of children, Add an article
an emotional
the emotional
however
in long-term
point of view it might be unuseful to get an occupation for most Correct article usage
the long-term
of
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apply
people
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the people
,
unless Remove the comma
apply
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they
the
have a Correct your spelling
they
previldge
or extremely talented.Correct your spelling
privilege
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