Despite a variety of sport facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever before. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solution can you suggest?

Nowadays, individuals have more opportunities for being in shape by going to the
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areas than
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, they avoid spending their time
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doing sports and the cause is that
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addicted
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digital devices. To tackle
this
issue, people must limit themselves and set restrictions
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their gadgets. These days, phone
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is one of the main
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on our Earth which is causing laziness and losing shape.
Hence
, society should avoid overusing phones in order to prevent these problems.
However
, many developed countries have a lot of
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facilities and places where people can participate as a sportsman which is great but not all have
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to take part in sports.
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, individuals need to control their schedule which in turn might assist them to be in shape.
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, if people had known the consequences of spending time on their gadgets, they would have spent less attention
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their devices and would have focused on their
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. setting restrictions and having
limit
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are
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the best
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solution
to tackle
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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