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PRESERVATION AND PROMOTION OF INDONESIAN CULTURE AND LANGUAGE IN THE ERA OF DIGITAL TECHNOLOGY IN CENTRAL ASIA

The initial question that I am going to dedicate
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 report is the promotion of
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Culture
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 and
Language
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 in Central Asia. With the influence of digital technology and pandemic
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 caused by Covid-19, there are a myriad number of young generation under the age of 30 from Central Asia involved in online learning
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 as courses with regard to their hobbies, which does not take much time,
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 it’s useful to combine with work or main study at the university. I suggest opening an online
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 where students from Central Asia can find activities which
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 quite interesting for them with a connection to
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culture
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 and
language
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. From my perspective, it will be extremely useful to divide the
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 into several directions
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 as
Indonesian
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cuisine
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 (Padang
cuisine
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, Balinese
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 for vegetarians),
Indonesian
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 Art,
Indonesian
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 ethnic groups,
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 land and
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Language
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. Nowadays not all
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 are passionate about music or dancing,
people
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 have various hobbies and interests, some
people
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 are very interested in cooking and studying the history of each meal, so they can learn the
culture
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 of
Indonesia
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 through its
cuisine
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. With the development of new technologies, it is not a problem to develop
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 platforms at a high level. It is possible to organize a competition between students of the
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 and send them to a
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 that already exists "
Indonesian
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 Art and
culture
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program
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".
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, the Ministries of Foreign Affairs of
Indonesia
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 can be aware in advance, who is going to the
program
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 and their capacity, and the person will be fully involved in the learning process during the scholarship
program
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. A vital issue that I am intended to consider here is not so much about developing
Indonesian
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culture
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 and
language
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, but maybe even preserving it in youngsters who have studied it in different programs . There are a great number of youth who have been influenced by
Indonesian
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culture
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 and
language
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,
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 we can observe a lot of examples when alumni of different scholarships arranged by the
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 government forget the
Indonesian
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language
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 over time. As the best example, I can consider myself. Knowledge must be used so that it is not forgotten. I can confidently confirm as a linguist when a
language
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 is not used for 4 months or more , it is necessarily and quietly forgotten. The online era is a cool opportunity to motivate
people
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 who are learning a
language
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 from a distance. On the same
platform
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 that was proposed above, it is possible to organize Olympiads, contentions for perfect mastery of
culture
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 and
language
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. To develop an international business, you can
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platform
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.
People
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 really like it when some skills bring them profit. You can offer jobs to
people
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 who have performed very well on the
platform
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 in
Indonesian
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 companies and introduce them to companies .
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 can give great motivation for businessmen and for students who can be a bridge between countries. To sum up, since I am fond of and respect
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 I believe in its power and development, I want all
people
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 who are involved with
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culture
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 to have the opportunity to continue to study it and use it in everyday life.

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