The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following diagrams illustrate the life cycle of

salmon

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from different perspectives.

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, there are 3 primary

step

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in a transformation from fry to smolt and to adult

salmon

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Firstly

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salmon

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eggs are placed in the upper river where the water current

are

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moving slowly. More clearly that in the reeds with a number of tiny stones. They spend almost half a year for eggs to develop into fry which

look

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looks

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similar to small

fishes

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fish

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, about 3 to 8

centimeter

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centimeters

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Secondly

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, some information present that after

turn

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turning

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in to

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into

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fry, they move to the

faster flowing

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faster-flowing

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water which

called

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lower

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a lower

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river, and stay there for about 4 years they grow and become larger , s

molt

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moult

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, which is about 12 to 15

centimeter

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centimetre

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, they continue their journey to the open sea, another 5 years were spent and eventually smolt develop

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an adult

salmon

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which

about

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70 to 76 cm.

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they again move to the upper river for reproduction after reaching

this

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stage

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

165 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

freshwater streams
small pebbles
reeds
alevin
yolk sac
nourishment
fry
grow stronger
grow larger
parr
defined markings
estuaries
smolt
adapt to saltwater
ocean
full size
sexual maturity
spawn
life cycle

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