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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#research #governments #companies
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At present, scientific
research
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 across the world is carried out and controlled sometimes by governments, sometimes by private companies. While there are some arguments favouring scientific
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 by corporations, I agree that
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 should be funded and supervised by the state. The private sector argues that it is willing to undertake scientific
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, but there are two significant dangers in
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. In terms of the quality and objectivity of the
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 itself, corporations that carry
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 out may be tempted to manipulate results in order to maximize profits. There have been numerous scandals
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 of new products being introduced hurriedly after inadequate trials.
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, thalidomide, developed by a German drug company, resulted in the birth of thousands of malformed children. From an ethical perspective, leaving
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 into areas
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 as genetic engineering in the hands of corporations may have profound social consequences -
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 as GM crops, with unproven effects which may destroy whole ecosystems
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 of meddling with nature.
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 governments have to allocate resources to many areas of public spending, it is essential that they be responsible for scientific
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, the highest standards can be set by providing funding for university departments to carry out high-quality
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 designed to benefit society, not to break into new markets or to gain a competitive edge. Knowledge
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 gained can be shared worldwide throughout the academic community.
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, government-decision making is the best way to prioritize expenditure on specific areas of
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, taking into consideration the needs of society, both present and future. One example is the development of renewable energy to meet growing demands. In conclusion, I agree strongly with the view that governments should bear sole responsibility for scientific
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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