You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •give details of the purchase •describe the problem •explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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to express my dissatisfacation towards my recent purchase from your online shop. I bought a dress for my birthday on 26 March. It was a long yellow dress with an extra shawl.
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, after a few tries of wearing the dress, I decided to wash it, and
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I started to notice there is a problem with its size
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it's getting loose. The main issue
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my birthday is very soon
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, and
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I need my clothes to be ready.
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, I tried to contact the shop's service center but they refused to help me with
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issue, which made my
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experience with
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shop really disappointing. I would really appreciate
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you could look into
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matter and provide me a full refund or a better replacement with no additional charge. I am
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attaching the receipt for your reference. I hope
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matter is resolved promptly. Looking forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Halla Rabeea

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Say more about the order, like size, order number, or when it came.
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Make the problem more clear. Say if the dress became too big after one wash.
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Explain the urgent need in a fuller way, for example, give the date of your birthday.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'First', 'Also', and 'So' to make ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each part. The second part has two ideas together.
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You answered all parts of the task.
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The tone is polite and right for a letter to a company.
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The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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Your greeting and closing are good and formal.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • order number
  • order date
  • item
  • product
  • price
  • size
  • color
  • fit
  • delivered
  • faulty
  • defective
  • damaged
  • wrong
  • not as described
  • photos
  • packaging
  • return
  • return label
  • replacement
  • exchange
  • refund
  • money back
  • shipping
  • delivery
  • courier
  • tracking
  • customer service
  • contact
  • email
  • phone
  • urgent
  • ASAP
  • quick
  • response
  • policy
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