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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one bog traffic jam'. How do you think this statement is true? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over thirty years ago,
people
 have bought
cars
 in a high number in many countries for making life easy as well as
luxiourous
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luxurious
 which causes
alot
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a lot
 of traffic
jam
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 on the roads.
This
 statement is absolutely true because
people
 have generated a habit of using
cars
. Numerous measures
can
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 be taken by
government
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 will be elaborated in the forthcoming paragraphs. In the beginning,
first
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 measure could be making
the
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strict laws and regulations within the country to ensure
general
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 public start using public transports
such
 as Buses,Trains,
Metros
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 etc.
This
 can be done through passing a bill in the constitution like each and every person must commute through public transport modes thrice in a week
otherwise
 it would be punishable or penalty can be charged instantly. Another aspect, a significant increase in prices of fuel, car parking too which can lead to
reduce
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 in traffic jams.If
these cost
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this cost
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 will be hiked, so
people
 stop using
cars
 sooner. As additional cost will not be bear up by
people
. To sum up, high usage of other transport ways and hike of the cost for fuel as well as parking could discourage
people
 to drive
cars
 on the road.
Therefore
, there will be
a
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very
less chances
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little chance
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 of traffic jams.
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