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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is claimed that
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 can gather people who have cultural and age differences. I disagree with
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 statement to some extent. On the one hand, I admit
music
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 as a universal language may unity people with differences.
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, it could connect the majority through their emotions.
For instance
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, when a piece of
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 become popular in the United States in English, after a while
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 noticeable number of people in the east, with another culture or even language, will hear it at the same time or with few weeks apart.
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 bond is created because they have similar feelings,
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 as sadness or happiness by hearing the same
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.
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,
music
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 can affect different age groups in the same way. To illustrate, Mohammed Reza Shajarian, an old traditional Iranian singer, has a noticeable portion of his fans, in
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 population in Iran, as well as elderlies.
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, these potential functions are overshadowed by other factors.
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,
music
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 may help individuals to be connected with a universal language,
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 as English, but there are a large number of songs singing in other languages.
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, some cultures vary too much, and the gap is so huge which can not be filled by a song.
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, the generation gap is becoming more every day, and due to that,
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the taste
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 of
evey
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every
 age is so different
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 the others. So these days, it is very uncommon that children
listen
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 to the same
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 that their parents do. In conclusion, despite the potential benefits of
music
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 in connecting various cultures and ages, I disagree that it unity them, efficiently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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