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In many workplaces, online communication is now, more common than face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, an increasing trend for virtual meetings among multinational companies
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growth. In-person meetings
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 been reduced slightly in several organisation. The most important advantages
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disadvantages
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To begin
 with, the most significant merit of online communication is time saving due to no travelling into the office. Various employees who are working from home could join the meeting call either audio or video through tablets,mobile phones or laptops and they like it
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a lot
. As
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 of work become so easy using some applications for an instance Microsoft teams, zoom, skype etc. These all apps are very popular and used by people in offices.
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, no formal touch became an issue which is a big disadvantage. Since people cannot meet in any
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conference
 room like earlier. There is no
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recognition
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 became a challenge in front of senior management. To conclude, there is always pros and cons
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 everything in the world. Despite
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 fact, I recommend virtual meetings or discussions higher than face to face
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 because
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 of work in terms of
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time and money.
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