Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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differ as to whether or not financial help is needed for developing countries to continue their
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. While there are some strong arguments against
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finanial
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help, which
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still believe
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is
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aspect of
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the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that
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help has several benefits. They argue that it would make the process of improvement faster. As a matter of fact, developing countries could use these financial helps to climb the
development
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ladder faster. It is
also
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believed that since
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depends on
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sufficient power in different kinds of industries, if these financial
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are used directly in core industries, it would help developing countries to gain more.
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the other hand, some people argue that there are several advantages to
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practical aid or advice. From their point of view, with the practical aids and
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advice
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advices
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they could learn the main strategies of
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for
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term. Once you learn the basics and principles of success and
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, you can achieve it in any situation at any time. It
also
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maintained that the financial
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are temporary because problems start again after the end of financial aid, but the practical
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advice
advices
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would remain. In conclusion,
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financial help certainly has its benefits, but
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believe that the benefits of practical aid and
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them in long term.

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