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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Food
 consumption is considered an essential part of human lives. Eating junk
food
 might cause a detrimental influence on eating preferences, social life, surrounding eco-system, etc. Subjectively, I consider a ready-made cuisine inevitable for use especially these days, due to the needs of masses to intake cheaper
food
 sources.
For example
, ready-made lunch usually costs 2-3$ and preparing it takes a short period of time. So, the price of fast
food
, as well as a fast serving, might be crucial in choosing
food
 sources. In daily
life
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 employees do not have an opportunity to cook home-made foods or that which is really preferable for them, due to mainly lack of time.
Hence
, all-known marketed trademarks like McDonald's or KFC are chosen more than traditional cuisine restaurants.
In addition
, the aforementioned fast
food
 restaurants prepare semi-ready sources and ingredients for a supply of as many consumers as possible, despite not worrying about filing. Appropriately, public catering entities are not interested in using natural and fresh ingredients, unfortunately. Not all but the majority of
food
 producers might add not fresh fruit and vegetables because they are considered as perishable foodstuffs.
Therefore
, a permanent intake of
such
 meals may cause health-related problems or trigger an allergic reaction
as a result
.
In addition
, staffing spoilt vegetables
changes
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 the overall taste,
thus
food
 products from some junk
food
 retail outlets even do not justify the bill. To sum up, it is evident that people`s eating habits are changed over the past years, so with
this
 increased importance of fast
food
. In my point of view, it is recommended to know the balance on eating in an individual order, because it seems too hard to alter relation to
food
.
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