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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I believe unity is strength, but
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, some believe that since the women are the final decision maker to whether have a baby or not, she
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 has to be the one who is obligated to raise the child by itself, so I strongly disagree with the mentioned idea due to the fact that the mother's role has changed during recent decades and the constant needs of
children
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 to their
fathers
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. A good reason that justifies my opinion is that the role of the mother has changed. In most families with
children
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 at home, a majority of mothers are working outside for pay along with their husbands. Not having enough quality time to dedicate to the
children
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 as their mothers force the
fathers
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 to be more involved in the nurturing process. So, as
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 parents are
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 active in meeting the family's financial needs, they should be
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 under the same obligation to care for their
children
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's needs. Another point to consider is that bringing up from birth through adulthood only with the mothers would deprive
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 of the father's benefit. Not only are
fathers
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 expected to meet the basic needs of the
children
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,
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 as food, shelter, and clothing, they
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 are bound to provide a feeling of security,
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 physical and emotional. Scientific research shows that
children
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 are way better off when they have a close emotional bond with their
fathers
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. In conclusion,
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 parents are the pillars in the development of a child's emotional well-being, and together they should help hand in hand to provide their basic needs as well as emotional.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Equal Parenting
  • 2. Gender Roles
  • 3. Societal Expectations
  • 4. Emotional Well-being
  • 5. Psychological Development
  • 6. Legal Frameworks
  • 7. Workplace Policies
  • 8. Gender Equality
  • 9. Traditional Responsibilities
  • 10. Active Fatherhood
  • 11. Balanced Development
  • 12. Undue Burden
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