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- Children should never be educated by parents at home. Do you agree?

#children #parents #home
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Children should never be educated by parents at home So, I think it’s not that bad to be educated by parents sometimes but not permanently. I think it’s okay because the parents can make it easier to understand
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 subject. Every teacher has his own way of leading his class and is not always understood by
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, if the child study only at home, he will be without friends and will be hard in his life without friends. In school you can make your own choices and work on yourself, to build your future and make friends. The teachers usually tell you things that can help you one day and your peents will not tell you these
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 because they see you as their child
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 not okay to study permanently at home.
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